[Flash Fiction] The Little Girl in the Back Seat

I’m sure that the little girl in that back seat was signing us…can you speed up a little bit?”

Devan rolled his eyes, but complied, edging closer to the boxy car in front.

“She’s spelling something.”

Devan started to reply with something along the lines of ‘you’re being paranoid, bro’, but stopped short when he saw the wide-eyed girl staring at him through the back window, feverishly moving her hands.

“Two fingers to the right…‘H’.”

Devan glanced at his brother, who had pulled up the Sign Language alphabet on his phone, his gaze hastily moving from the girl to his phone and back.  

“Sort of a fist…‘O’? No, wait, ‘E’. And that’s an ‘L’. And…”


Devan looked at his brother in silence, time stopping as realization dawned on them. In a jolt of reality rushing back, Devan floored the accelerator, his brother gripping his seatbelt with one hand and dialing 911 with the other.

“We’re chasing a little girl who’s been kidnapped! WE’RE ON A FREAKING HIGHWAY. THRE ARE NO CROSS-STREETS-”

Devan tuned out his brother, focusing on tailing the car, the pleading gaze of the little girl glued to his. Hang in there, honey. Help’s coming.

© Jade M. Wong 2016

carWritten for Flash Fiction for the Purposeful Practitioner. Word Count: 198. 

27 thoughts on “[Flash Fiction] The Little Girl in the Back Seat

  1. quite a punch for something less than 200 words! good job, i am impressed because you had so much detail and built the tension and emotion up quite nicely!

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    1. Thanks! I find that having a word limit makes you value the importance of every word and really challenges you to say as much as you can in as little as possible.

      I appreciate the read and comment, thanks again!

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  2. This is awesome, I’m on the edge of my seat….I saw on some show that something like this did happen in real life, they called the cops and they came and picked up the chase and saved the girl…amazing.

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  3. Hey!
    This was cool! and you know what? When you wrote H-E-L and? … I thought the exact same way! …
    On second thoughts, if you ever write a continuation, you could make it hilarious when the stop the car and it is revealed that the kid was just trying to tell HELLO! kids like to do those things in the back seat!

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      1. haha :p thank you ! I do hope, you update it! It’s gonna look awesome for the blog (sometimes, there are two reasons … the other one being.. Yeah! I get credit :p) nothing of that sort, m just a crazy lunatic who likes to make jokes! :p

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