[Poetry] The Choice

On the bathroom floor,
Glass shard in hand,
It catches the light,
Is this the end?

And the tears, they
Bounce off the glass.
Shutting my eyes, I’ll
Just make this fast.

What of the dreams
I’ve yet to dream?
What of the world
I’ve yet to see?

I lift the glass
Away from my skin.
This night, I choose
To breathe and begin.

© Jade M. Wong


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99 thoughts on “[Poetry] The Choice

  1. […] I think that the length of the poem really emphasises how quickly mental illness can take hold, how impulsive it can be and how sometimes all it takes is the right motivation, the right dream, to realise that life has more to offer than death. Jade’s poem is beautiful and hopeful, leaving you to think over the possibilities the future could hold. Click to read the full poem here. […]

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  2. http://www.english.emory.edu/classes/Handbook/meter.html

    I think it is fun to use rhyming and traditional poetic metre when writing, because it is seldom used in contemporary poetry, however I get the sense of swerving in-between a broken metre and free verse in this poem. This can be a fun idea, however there is a difference between consciously writing this way and doing it out of ignorance of form.

    What of the dreams
    I’ve yet to dream?
    What of the world
    I’ve yet to see?

    This is perfect Iambic pentameter, but it is the only one of all your verses that is consistent. I’m curious if that is what you’re going for?

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    • Thank you for that perspective! I actually wasn’t going for iambic pentameter for this particular poem. I was instead focused on keeping each line short (4 words per line) to give it the impression that each line was a breath. That’s one of the things I was aiming to convey.

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  3. I really, really like this. I suffer from depression & this speaks to me. Thank you for this. I’m new to WordPress but a lot of what I’ll be writing will deal with my struggles, life, what’s going on in my mind. Follow me if you’d like 🙂

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