[Poetry] Breakdown

It’s not like in the movies—
When the girl cries softly,
Her teardrops falling gently,
Her lips plump and red like rubies.

It’s agonizing and excruciating and loud—
With globs of tears leaving a trace
Of mascara staining her face,
Falling apart in the few moments she’d allowed.

It’s like carving your heart with every sob—
Falling into despair, deeply and suddenly,
Until you feel your heart beat stubbornly,
And remember there’s hope in every throb.

 

© Jade M. Wong


Written for dVerse’s Tuesday Poetics. Prompt: Find the beauty in ugliness.

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49 thoughts on “[Poetry] Breakdown

    • Thank you very much! I agree, movies and tv shows never hit reality on the mark, but I suppose that’s why they’re movies and not real life. I’m glad you enjoyed this poem, and I’m glad we have a mutual friend in Gina! She’s such a wonderful and perceptive person. Thank you for stopping by, Gospel Isosceles 🙂

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    • Thank you so much! Yes, there is beauty in sadness, if we choose to see it. Hope is definitely, as Emily Dickinson wisely said, “the thing with feathers, that perches in the soul”. Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts, Dorianna!

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  1. Your poem is deceptively well-structured, Jade, with a subtle rhyme scheme and conversational tone. And you’e right – it’s never like the movies.I love the way you’ve captured the ugliness of a good old sob in the list of three ‘It’s agonizing and excruciating and loud’ and the ‘globs of tears, and I felt the pain ‘carving your heart with every sob’. The beauty of it is captured so well in the final lines!

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    • Thank you so much Kim! I had wanted to capture the feel of a conversation in this poem and I’m glad you felt that was conveyed. No, nothing is ever truly like the movies, I think. Thank you for reading and sharing your insightful comments!

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    • Aww thank you. I agree, crying can be extremely soothing and cleansing and sometimes, it helps so much to just let everything out. It was my pleasure to participate in the prompt. Thank you for hosting this week!

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  2. no make up artist on hand for perfect touch ups, tears flowing freely are the most beautiful form of expression, in all its ugliness – a very good take on the writing prompt Jade, just love this

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  3. oh yes! It’s not like in the movies….so well said! Crying can be….well….viscerally ugly if one looks at it carefully. Mascara running….nose running…..blotchy cheeks. But the emotion felt is a beautifully raw thing.
    And yes….good rhyme scheme as well.

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    • A very insightful perspective, Björn, thank you. Yes, I think the reason behind the tears as well as the reason for not giving up are definitely more important than the tears themselves. Still, sometimes, I think you need to just lose yourself in the moment and have yourself an ugly cry 😅

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